July 11, 2007

May I take my time?

Every morning,the first thing for me to confront with is nothing but thinking which
way to school.
I am afraid of being tired of it.

I know the end is on its way.
But I am getting more and more overwhelmed.
I want to take a rest,just throwing books out of my sight.

Now,my feeling is just like playing BRIDGE.
Sometimes,I don't want to think too much to enjoy this game.
I want to choose any card at random,although I can only give up two rounds.

Just like meeting your girlfriend.
There are 30 mins left before the time you appointed.
You see that there is a bus going to leave the bus stop,and you don't want to spend
your energy catching it up,although it will take 25 mins to get the place where she is waiting for you.

Just like walking on the rainy street without any umbrella.
Your place appears at your sight.
You still do not want to run,although you may get cold.

I hope everyting will be alright.
I hope I can put my step on the way to the end without the feeling like what I feel
now.

※PS
This is my first article in English. I hope YOU can point out everyting incorrect and correct me.
Or give me any piece of advice. THANKS!!! XDDD

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    1樓搶頭香

    Behind your words lies a solemn emotion that not everyone can
    easily realize; however, your metaphor for that is an common
    daily experience so that the readers can relate to it.

    OK! I will tell you about what I think about your article.

    First, we need to take our expressing ability into account when
    writing masterpieces. Most students in our school have the
    ability to construct an ordinary piece of article, but the
    standard is not for us."Further Polishing"is an important step.
    For example, "Every morning,the first thing for me to confront
    with is nothing but thinking which way to school."This sentence
    is OK but a little flat. I think you want to express your
    thought about stirring something special in your daily life, so
    you can use some VIGOROUS WORDS to make sentences wonderful!

  • popojjdd at July 11, 2007 07:57 AM comment | prosecute
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    2樓頸推

    Rewording
    "When the same morning comes with a lot of annoying, the first
    tough mission for me to confront with is nothing but deciding
    which way to take a short trip to my school. "
    (Sometimes using words like "thing" makes article flat, so it
    will be much better if you can specify what you want to say )

    By doing this step to polish, your article will be more and more
    fascinating!In addition, some skills of description are beyond
    our ability. Some picturesque description won't necessarily be
    accept; therefore, THINK BEFORE YOU LEAP. Trying to figure out
    the best way to express your thought is most important of all.

    Uh! That's what I think. I hope you won't mind I type in
    English. Besides, I love your English article as much as your
    Chinese works. Keep your good jobs, and you can difinitely write
    down more masterpieces.^^

  • popojjdd at July 11, 2007 08:09 AM comment | prosecute
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    3樓坐沙發

    天啊!我打錯好多字^^(哈哈)

  • popojjdd at July 11, 2007 08:11 AM comment | prosecute
  • 4樓

    福樓

    呵呵,謝囉!!!
    英文好的就是不一樣^^

    (孰能無過呢?)

  • a745856 at July 11, 2007 07:41 PM comment | prosecute
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